Name: 應避免的 5 個常見寫作錯誤 (5 Common Writing Mistakes to Avoid)
Uploaded: 2025-07-22T18:51:31.000Z
Duration: 18 min 8 s

In today's video, I want to give you some writing tips, especially five things not to do, five things to avoid in your writing.

在今天的視頻中，我想給大家介紹一些寫作技巧，尤其是在寫作中不能做的五件事，要避免的五件事。

Now, for those of you who are familiar with my other YouTube channel, youtube.com slash write to the top, I do a lot of videos like this to show you how to make your writing a little bit stronger, and I have made videos about these tips, but I want to share it with everybody here as well, so you can also go to that channel and get some more writing tips if you need them.

現在，對於那些熟悉我的另一個 YouTube 頻道（youtube.com slash write to the top）的人來說，我做了很多這樣的視頻，告訴你們如何讓自己的寫作能力更強一些，我已經制作了關於這些技巧的視頻，但我也想在這裡與大家分享，所以如果你們需要的話，也可以去那個頻道獲取更多寫作技巧。

So today, we're going to look at five things that you should not do in writing.

是以，今天我們來看看在寫作中不應該做的五件事。

Number one, avoid wordiness, and I'll explain each of these separately.

第一，避免詞不達意，我將逐一解釋。

Avoid jargon, avoid redundancy, avoid making assumptions, and the most important one, avoid freestyling, and I'll explain that as we get to it.

避免行話，避免冗餘，避免假設，還有最重要的一點，避免自由發揮。

那麼，讓我們從一個詞開始，那就是 "詞不達意"。

It means you're using too many words to express ideas, and generally what happens when you do this, the reader either gets bored because you're just wasting their time with too many words they don't need, or the message gets a little bit confused because I'm not sure what exactly I'm supposed to focus on because there are so many words being used, right?

這意味著你用了太多的詞來表達想法，一般來說，如果你這樣做，讀者要麼會覺得無聊，因為你用了太多他們不需要的詞來浪費他們的時間，要麼就是資訊有點混亂，因為我不確定我到底應該關注什麼，因為用了太多的詞，對嗎？

So another thing to remember is that more does not equal better.

是以，要記住的另一點是，越多並不等於越好。

What you want to aim to do is be concise.

Concise means as short as possible, as direct as possible.

簡明是指儘可能簡短，儘可能直接。

So basically, I want to get to your message right away without having to read too many words, and these days especially, a lot of people, they skim, they don't actually read every word.

所以，基本上，我想馬上就看到你的資訊，而不用讀太多的字，尤其是現在，很多人都是略讀，他們實際上並沒有讀完每一個字。

So if you can say something with two words, don't use five, for example.

是以，如果用兩個詞就能說清楚，就不要用五個詞。

You use precise language, precise adjectives, precise verbs, precise nouns, etc., and be very selective about the words you use.

你要使用準確的語言、準確的形容詞、準確的動詞、準確的名詞等，對你使用的詞語要精挑細選。

Now, the only way to do this, of course, is to build your vocab base.

當然，要做到這一點，唯一的辦法就是打好詞彙基礎。

If you want to write better, if you want to speak better, if you want to communicate better, you need more words.

如果你想寫得更好，如果你想說得更好，如果你想交流得更好，你就需要更多的詞彙。

More words allow you to have variety, but they also allow you to have concision.

字數越多，內容就越豐富，同時也越簡潔。

The more words you have, the fewer words you actually need to use, which is a little bit strange thinking, but that's how it works.

字數越多，實際需要使用的字數就越少，這種想法有點奇怪，但就是這樣。

I'll give you a couple of examples, and these are taken from essays that I have actually read and checked because I do assessments and stuff like that, and I'm a certified editor.

我給你們舉幾個例子，這些都是我真正讀過並檢查過的文章，因為我做過評估之類的工作，我是一名合格的編輯。

So, the first point that I would like to make is that ...

If you're going to start a paragraph like this, you're already lost the reader's attention.

如果你要這樣開始一個段落，你已經失去了讀者的注意力。

The whole point of an essay or of writing is to make a point.

作文或寫作的全部意義在於表明觀點。

So, erase all of this and just get into your point.

所以，抹去這一切，直接進入你的主題吧。

And that's going to be part of redundancy as well, which we'll talk about soon.

這也是冗餘的一部分，我們很快就會談到。

These people have been working and farming on this land for over 800 years.

這些人已經在這片土地上工作和耕種了 800 多年。

You're giving a lot of information, but you're also using more words than necessary, right?

你提供了很多資訊，但也使用了比必要更多的詞彙，對嗎？

Now, if you had precision words, you can get rid of and put the word toiling.

現在，如果你有精確的單詞，你可以去掉並加上 "勞累 "一詞。

Toiling means to work hard, and it has the added idea of sweaty and painful back and all this stuff.

勞作的意思是辛勤地工作，而且還有汗流浹背、腰痠背痛之類的意思。

Working hard on the land means they've suffered for it, and so they have a sort of attachment to it, which you can probably tell the context of this sentence.

在這片土地上辛勤勞作意味著他們為這片土地吃過苦，是以他們對這片土地有一種依戀，從這句話的上下文中你大概可以看出這一點。

Now, if it's important, if this number is important, leave it.

現在，如果這很重要，如果這個數字很重要，那就留下它。

If you're just trying to show that it's a long time, just put for centuries.

如果只是想表示時間很長，就寫幾個世紀。

Now, you're thinking 800 years sounds like a lot.

現在，你會覺得 800 年聽起來很長。

When you're using centuries, that has a more emphatic idea to it.

當你使用 "世紀 "一詞時，它的含義會更加強烈。

A person will feel a stronger connection or a stronger experience when they've been doing something for centuries, because we think of centuries as a huge chunk of time, whereas 800 years is just a number.

當一個人做某件事情已經有幾個世紀的歷史時，他會感受到更強的聯繫或更強的體驗，因為我們認為幾個世紀是一大段的時間，而 800 年只是一個數字。

I know it doesn't sound logical, but in terms of people's response to reading, they have an emotional reaction to certain words over other words.

我知道這聽起來不符合邏輯，但就人們的閱讀反應而言，他們對某些詞語的情緒反應要強於其他詞語。

Numbers don't create that emotional connection as much as words that imply something, right?

數字不如文字更能引起情感共鳴，不是嗎？

Again, that's a little bit more very detailed tip to writing, but again, the main thing you want to do now is reduce your word count.

再說一遍，這是更詳細的寫作技巧，但還是那句話，你現在要做的最主要的事情就是減少字數。

So, I went from 15, I think, to 9, right?

所以，我從 15，我想，到 9，對不對？

Now, you're thinking six words, not a big deal to save, but over a whole essay, and if you're doing this constantly to all of your sentences, you're reducing the word count a lot.

現在，你想的是六個字，省下來不是什麼大問題，但在整篇文章中，如果你對所有句子都不斷這樣做，你就會減少很多字數。

So, just a side tip for now, for anybody who's writing essays, like academic, especially if you're in university or college or all that, or if you're applying to university and you're writing a statement or a personal statement, etc., remember that you want to retighten, you want to reduce the word count to have better style.

所以，現在給大家一個小提示，對於任何寫論文的人來說，比如學術論文，特別是如果你在大學或學院或所有這些地方，或者如果你正在申請大學，你正在寫一份聲明或個人陳述等，請記住，你要重新收緊，你要減少字數，以便有更好的風格。

So, anytime you're finished with your first draft, what I normally do, the first step, I cut out 10% of the words.

所以，當你完成初稿後，我通常會做的第一步就是刪掉 10%的字。

Right away, the first thing I want to do is cut out 10%.

我想做的第一件事就是立即減少 10%。

Right away, as I'm doing that, I'm seeing where things can be shifted and tightened. 10% is a lot.

就在我這樣做的時候，我馬上就看到了可以調整和收緊的地方。10% 是個很大的比例。

Start with 5% and move your way up to 10%.

Okay, so now we're going to look at a couple more of those things to avoid.

好了，現在我們來看看還有哪些需要避免的事情。

Jargon is technical language or very specific language for a specific topic.

行話是技術性語言或針對特定主題的非常具體的語言。

So, if you're talking, like for example, medicine with doctors, medical people have very specific words that they use that non-medical people probably don't know.

是以，如果你和醫生談論醫學等話題，醫務人員會使用一些非常特殊的詞彙，而非醫務人員可能不知道這些詞彙。

So, if you're a doctor and you're talking to non-medical people, you don't want to throw out a lot of medical words because they won't understand what you're talking about.

是以，如果你是一名醫生，在與非醫學界人士交談時，你不希望拋出很多醫學詞彙，因為他們不會理解你在說什麼。

And I'll give you an example in a moment.

So, make sure you know your target audience.

是以，請務必瞭解您的目標閱聽人。

And I'm going to talk about target audience again in a minute, but make sure you're writing to the right people.

稍後我將再次談到目標閱聽人，但要確保你的文章寫給了正確的人。

So, generally, there are two types of readers for any article or any paper, etc.

是以，一般來說，任何文章或論文等都有兩類讀者。

Experts, so the people who are in the field that you're in and you're writing basically to them.

專家，也就是你所在領域的人，你基本上是寫給他們看的。

So, if you're a PhD student and you're writing a paper about dementia and you're pretty sure that the only people who will read this are people like nurses and doctors or social workers who work with dementia patients, then yes, you can use very technical language, you can use a lot of jargon.

是以，如果你是一名博士生，正在撰寫一篇關於老年痴呆症的論文，而且你很確定只有護士、醫生或與老年痴呆症患者打交道的社工等人才會閱讀這篇文章，那麼是的，你可以使用非常專業的語言，可以使用大量的行話。

But if you're writing a paper and you hope that non-medical, non-experts read it, we call these laypersons.

但如果你在寫論文，希望非醫學、非專業人士閱讀，我們稱之為非專業人士。

It used to be laymen, but now that's politically not correct, so don't say laymen.

以前是外行，但現在政治上不正確了，所以不要說外行。

Notice, I don't say laypeople, I just pluralize the persons.

注意，我沒有說外行人，我只是把人複數化了。

That's fine when it's in a conjunction like this.

如果是這樣的連詞，那就沒問題了。

If you're writing to laypersons, simplify the language.

如果是寫給外行人看的，那就簡化語言。

You can mention the technical name of something, but then make sure you explain what it is in simple terms so that they can relate to it.

您可以提及某樣東西的技術名稱，但一定要用簡單的語言解釋它是什麼，這樣他們就能聯想到它。

So, for example, if you're a doctor and you tell me and you write to me about encephalitis, I'm like, okay, I've heard that word before, I'm not exactly sure what it means, then there's not much point reading anymore because I won't understand you.

是以，舉例來說，如果你是一名醫生，你告訴我，你給我寫信說腦炎，我就會說，好吧，我以前聽說過這個詞，但我不太清楚它是什麼意思，那就沒有什麼閱讀意義了，因為我不會理解你的意思。

For me, write brain swelling, which basically is what encephalitis is.

對我來說，寫腦脹，基本上就是腦炎。

Make me write with words I understand, not with technical words.

讓我用我能理解的詞語寫作，而不是用專業詞語。

是以，這是一件非常重要的事情。

Now, I've noticed, I've read hundreds of IELTS and TOEFL essays in my time, and if you're one of those people taking these tests, don't throw in a lot of technical words to try to impress the examiners.

現在，我注意到，我已經讀過數百篇雅思和託福作文，如果你也是參加這些考試的人，就不要為了給考官留下深刻印象而使用大量專業詞彙。

If the examiners don't know this word and they have to look it up in a dictionary, you're losing points.

如果考官不認識這個詞，他們不得不查字典，那你就丟分了。

But for everybody else who's not doing these tests and you're just writing articles or blog posts or academic papers, make sure that the person reading it can understand what you're saying.

但對於不做這些測試，只是寫文章、博客文章或學術論文的其他人來說，要確保閱讀者能理解你在說什麼。

Then we'll talk about the next point is redundancy.

接下來，我們將討論冗餘問題。

So, if something is redundant, essentially it's unnecessary.

是以，如果某樣東西是多餘的，基本上它就是不必要的。

It's basically the most common type of redundancy is repetition.

基本上，最常見的冗餘類型就是重複。

You're saying something that you've already mentioned before, unnecessary.

你說的這些話你之前已經說過了，沒必要再說了。

Tell me once, I'll understand it, move on to your next point.

告訴我一次，我就明白了，接著說你的下一個問題。

Repeating only puts in more words, so you get wordiness.

重複只會增加字數，從而導致詞不達意。

It bores me, it might confuse me, and it's a little bit insulting because it shows me that you don't trust me to understand what you're writing.

這讓我厭煩，可能會讓我感到困惑，還有點侮辱我，因為這表明你不相信我能理解你寫的東西。

Like maybe you're too smart for me and I can't...

也許你對我來說太聰明瞭，我不能...

I don't know what you're saying, so you have to explain it to me again in simpler terms.

我不明白你在說什麼，所以你必須用更簡單的語言再向我解釋一遍。

Here's an example, gentrification, this is a big word but it's a very common word, especially these days.

這裡有一個例子，"紳士化"（gentrification），這是一個很大的詞，但卻是一個很常見的詞，尤其是最近。

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