inthisvideo, we'regoingtowrite a responseto a questionwiththeactionwordsdo.
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Andthisis a questiontypethathasbeenreportedtometwicesofarin 2017 andit's stillquiteearlyintheyear, soit's possiblethatyoucouldget a questionlikethisonyourexam.
Okay, sointhisquestion, you'regoingtowanttostructuretheresponsein a waythatallowsyoutodiscusstheadvantagesandthedisadvantages.
Itispossibleforyoutodeclare a positionintheintroductionparagraph, butthesetypesofquestionswhereyou'reaskedfor, liketheprosandtheconsoftheadvantagesofthedisadvantagestheyworkbestwhenyoudokindofgothroughsomesortofdiscursiveprocesstocometo a a reasonedconclusion.
Sothat's what I'm goingtodointhissampleessay.
Now, beforeyoucommityourpentopaper, ofcourse, youwanttohave a bitof a brainstormobsessionsthatyouhave, youknow, ideasinmindBeforeyoustartthewritingprocess, thiswillhelpyoutowritemorefluentlyandtohaveyouryourentireessayworkmuchbetter.
Um, youknow, as a cohesivewhole.
Sobeforesortofvideo, I cameupwiththeseideas.
Soontheadvantagesside, I thought, firstandforemost, youknow, havinginternationalstudentsattheuniversityexchanges, itallowspeopletoexchangeunderstanding, andand, uh, thisenrichesthetheacademicexperienceas a whole.
But I thoughtthatsomethingthat's kindofbeeninthenewslately, youknow, withtheapprehensionaboutmigrationaroundtheworldrightnow, perhapslocalstudentsfeeltheyneedtocompetewithforeignstudents, andthiscouldleadtoemploymentissuesin a country.
You'rethesesortsofthings.
But I mean, youcanprobablytellbythetoneofmyvoicethat I I'm notcompletelyconvincedbythese.
Ishanissomethingthatisnoteasytosupport, butthere's not a lotofevidenceforokay, Soevenbefore I startedthisessay, I knowthat I amgoingtoconcludebysayingthattheadvantagesdoindeedoutweighthedisadvantages.
Beforeyoustartyouressay, you'reobviouslygoingtowriteandmuchmorecohesivein a muchmorecoherentpiecebecauseyouknowwhereyouwanttogowiththe S E eventually, Okay, that I hopetokeepallofyourlanguageinline.
Sowe'rehaving a bitof a mentalplanetis, ofcourse, important.
Solet's starttheessaynow.
I wantto, ofcourse, startwiththebackgroundsentencekindofdeclaringthesubjectoftheessay.
Now, thelastsentencethatwe'regoingtohaveinthisintroductionis a declarationofstructurefortheessayandis a verykeysentencebecauseitallowstheinthiscase, theExaminertoknowexactlywhatsortofstructuretheycanlookforintherestoftheessay.
Sotheseitemswillbeanalyzed, Um, inthisessayondhe, Then I willalsotelltheExaminerthat I'm goingtostatemypositionattheend.
Sobefore a positionisdeclaredsoyoucouldhavewrittenthispassiveimpassiveEnglish.
Butyoucouldsaybefore I declareah, position, whichwouldbefineaswell.
But I wasgonnaleavelikethis, sotheseitemswillbeanalyzed.
Thisthat's a propositionisdeclared.
Sonow, aswegothroughthis s e, I wanttopointout a fewofthedifferentlinkingitemsthat I'm usingandencourageyoutotryusingtheseinyourownessays.
So I started.
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Okay, Nowwewanttobe a bitmorenarrowwiththeexample.
So I'm goingto, um, justsortof, youknow, makesomethinguphere.
Soif I weretosay, a CanadianOh, I started, forexample, uh, comedianengineeringstudentsinJapanwould, um, sowouldbringideasandperspectives.
Um, differenceThatclassmates.
Um, andthen, let's say a phenomenonthat, uh, richestheuniversities, um, programas a fool.
Uh, so, forexample, a Canadianjeeringstudentin, uh, attending, uh, Japaneseuniversitywouldn't bringideasandperspectivesdifferenttothatoftheirclassmates.
A phenomenonthatenrichestheuniversityprogramas a whole.
Now, ofcourse, ifyoudidhavepersonalexperienceasaninternationalstudents, um, I don't, forexample, I mean, I'vegonetoschoolinCanadaandthe U.
Orifyouhadsomethingthatyoucouldyoucouldsayas a personalexperiencethatwouldobviously, youknow, bringtheexampletoelifeandbe a muchgreatergreatersupportforyourargument.
Butanyways, thisworksinthiscase.
So, forexample, a Canadianengineeringstudentattending a Japaneseuniversitywouldbringideasandperspectivesdifferenttothatoftheclassmates, a phenomenonthatenrichestheuniversity's program.
Solet's shiftusing, however, andokay, let's sayso.
However, now, ourdisadvantagepointwasthatlocalstudentsmaybethreatenedbyforeigntalent.
Thiscouldleadtothelossofjobs.
Um, sowesaidtheglobalizingofhighereducation, itdoeshave a certaindisadvantages.
Andyouknowwhat I like?
I wassaying, I mean, I wanttosortofgivethereaderthat, youknow, thefeelingthat I'm I'm muchmoreinsupportoftheadvantages, but I don't wanttodothatwithoutfullydeclaringwhatthedisadvantagescouldbe.
So I guesswhat I'm sayingis, I justwanttodistancemyself a littlebit.
And I guessthepointhereisthat, umyouknow, thesescouts, they'rethey'rebasingtheiropinionscompletelyontalent.
It's notnecessarilywherethestudentisfrom.
So I guess I justyouknow, um, a drawbackofhaving a largeforeignpopulationat a universityisthatitmightcutawaythejobopportunitiesthatwouldotherwisebeofferedtotolocaluniversitystudents.
I'm gonnamakeanexecutivedecisionhereandjustchangetheexampletothe U.
S.
Okay, so, intheUS, forexample, cosscope, talent, universitycampuses, andatselecttimes, thismeansofferingemploymentto a foreignstudentinsteadof a localstudent.
Okay, Um, okay, sonowthewholepointofthevideoiswe'relookingat a questionthatasksaboutwhetheradvantagesoutweighdisadvantages.
Sothat's whatyouknowourresponsetothatspecificsetofactionwordshappensrighthereintheintheconclusionparagraphinthiscase, andtheconclusionisveryeasytowritebecauseit's it's sortofjust a restatementofwhatyou'vealreadytalkedabout, andthen a declarationofyourposition.
So, um, astheabovediscussionrevealstheadvantagesmanagesof, um, localizedhighereducation, uh, muchwaythedisadvantages, um, and I'm justgonnastick a personalhopehere.
Soand I stronglyhopecountriescontinuetoencourage, umtoencourage, um, thankyou.
And I stronglyhopecountriescontinuetoencouragethegrowthoftheirforeignstudentbodies.
Okay, so, uh, see, youcouldtakethisentirephrasehereastheabovediscussionrevealstheadvantagesofrateandadaptthattoyourownwriting, muchoutweighthedisadvantages.
Okay, onthen, toshareyouryourhopeforthefuture, whichiskindof a nicewaytofinishanessayorrecommendationoryeah, thehopefor a recommendation.
However, manywouldarguetheglobalizingofhighereducationdoeshavecertaindisadvantagesforyou.
Formanyyoungadults, foreignstudentsmayrepresent a threattobothprofessionalopportunitiesafterschoolandtheoverallworkforceoftheircountryintheUS, forexample, cosscouttalentonuniversitycampusesandatselecttimes, thismeansofferingemploymentto a foreignstudentinsteadof a localstudent.